Some experts suggest a method to solve the environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuels and all vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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When it comes to the issue about environmental protection, somebody illustrates that the cost of fuels and cars should be raised. In my point of view, I disagree
this
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method. To be honest, the growth of the vehicles and fossil fuels is beneficial to the environment. Nowadays, more and more private cars lead to the traffic jam and in the meanwhile, it would result in the air pollution. As we know, cars would discharge a massive among of waste
gas which
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gas, which
could lead to the
green-house
a building with glass walls and roof; for the cultivation and exhibition of plants under controlled conditions
greenhouse
effect. To some extend, if we reduce the use of fossil fuels or cars, the air quality would be relatively well and our surrounding environment would be better.
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, cars play a very significant role in citizen’s daily life, raise the
prize
the property of having material worth (often indicated by the amount of money something would bring if sold)
price
of fuels and vehicles may have some negative effects to people. For workers or business man,
everyday
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every day
they rely on their private cars to be punctual because it is so convenient and they could never worry about
the late
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the lateness
of public transportation like
subway
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the subway
or bus. For
transportation industry
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the transportation industry
, all the service price would be
raise
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raise, such
such
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as the expresses, the foods, the letters and so on because of the higher
prize
the property of having material worth (often indicated by the amount of money something would bring if sold)
price
of fuels.
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, almost
all the
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all, the
prize of commodities would grow, and become the burden of all residents. All in all, if we want to reduce the environmental probl
em, govern
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the government
governments
ment should implement some policies to combat the
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