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Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think that cheap air flights should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, more people prefer to travel around the world with low cost flights has been
increase
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increased
 significantly,
therefore
, some people believe that travelling with low cost
flligh
a formation of aircraft in flight
flight
 will
increase
pollution
 in the atmosphere. I completely disagree that banning the flights will not decrease
air
pollution
 as they other factors brings many
probelms
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problems
 to the nation.
Undouthbly
, many people
wants
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want
 to go abroad because of
low price
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the low price
 of the flights which is
cheap
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cheaper
 and quicker than
transportation
 on the ground.
For example
, planes are faster than cars,
however
, motor mobile
also
 cause
pollution
 in the
air
 as well as
air
transportation
. I think that any transports can
increase
 rise in carbon dioxide level in the
air
. Going abroad with expensive
flights
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flight
 tickets
also
increase
pollutiontion
 which is similar as car ownership.
Nevertheless
, some people think that travelling overseas with inexpensive
planes
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plane
 tickets cannot
air
pollution
 from getting worst.
Moreover
, restricting cheap flight tickets does not prevent other
probrems
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problems
 from rising as they are various factors contributed to
causes
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cause
 many more issues. In my view, banning and stopping people to purchase tickets to go on holidays abroad will have a negative impact on
economy
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the economy
 overall. In conclusion, travelling abroad will not cause many more problems either using
air
transport
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transportation
 or auto ground transports. From my perspective, purchase cheap flights cannot be banned due to impact on
economy
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the economy
 and limit choices of tourist,
in addition
 to that, cars
also
 produce more toxic substances more than planes.
Goverment
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Government
 must spend more time reducing
use
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the use
 of
transportation
 by
empasise
special importance or significance
emphasis
 on advancements of
transportation
 to lower carbon dioxide in the atmosphere.
Submitted by Somchai Kachiram on

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