Write a letter to the editor to give your opinion about a magazine that you purchased. Include Why you bought it What you liked and disliked about it Suggestions for improvement

Dear Sir, I am a regular reader of the Daily Times magazine. I am writing
this
letter to share my views on the latest edition of the magazine that l purchased
last
week. I am fond of reading magazines and Daily Times is one of my favourites.
Last
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edition has covered the
stories
about our army personnel who have devoted their
life
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the country. Personally, I love to read all
such
stories
and that encouraged me to buy
the
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particular copy of the magazine. The persuasive reason to buy the publication is the
stories
covered about the people who have fought in various battles at borders. I like to read
the
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such
journals, but at the same
time
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I do not like that their personal
life
is not being shown.
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of any
life
is incomplete with showing only one aspect of it.
However
, I would like to suggest you
to
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add the flavour of their personal
life
including families and relatives to make it more impactful.
Furthermore
, covering the
stories
from different perspectives can enhance the writing. Hope you can publish more
stories
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better content in future. Yours sincerely, Barry Richardson
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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