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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. in what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? has this become a positive or a negatuve development?

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As the world is becoming a global village, the way people interact is solely being relied on technology. Technology has tremendously helped in connecting to any part of the world, at any time. In the recent years, technological devices
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 as smart phones have gained a popular interest among people of all ages. Today, even a kid of seven years old is seen using a mobile phone. People have started interacting with others more often that they did in the past. Communication is made easier with minimal cost involved through the release of free applications.
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 to that, through the use of social media people easily gain an insight
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, which might attract them to start friendships. As everything has its pros and cons, so does technology. Since people know other’s preferences they only tend to make relationships based on a person’s financial status, which can be categorized as being materialistic.
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, calls to friends are longer than time spent with family. Some people have started avoiding social gatherings and keep their conversation limited to video calls only.
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 to that companies prefer virtual meetings now over face to face meetings which reduces the creativity and seriousness of an individual. In conclusion, I believe if used moderately, technology will not put an impact
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Submitted by Abeera Ayub on

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