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Many parents today organise extra classes for their children after school and at the weekends. Do you feel that this is a worthwhile thing to do or do you feel children have enough education at school? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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It is often seen that many parents are in a favour of sending their children to private coaching classes, outside the
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 weekend. I believe there is no harm in giving them tuitions
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 if they really need it to improve their studies. It is undeniable that children always need some kind of adult help in their academic area, no matter how good their
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 are teaching. In
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where both the parents are working, for them it is sometime hard to find time for their children's studies.
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Therefore, sending
 their children to extra classes is very beneficial
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 in order to improve their academic grades.
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 in the UK many NHS working parents did not get enough time
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 as it is hard for them to escape because of their vital duties
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they would prefer to send their children in coaching classes. Another possible reason to provide children private tutoring is children own need.Many times it would seem that children unable to concentrate in big groups like classrooms.All children have different needs and level of understanding.For
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 children who get difficulty in studying in
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coaching classes are proven to be very helpful.
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some children are only weak in
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a few subjects
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 where they need some extra classes for improvement.
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, parents are in opinion of sending their children to tuition.Many times
school
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 itself provided extra classes to their students
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who did not do well in the classrooms and
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 advise their parents for private tutoring
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to ensure the child's progress in studies. On the whole ACCEPT SPACE ,
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nowadays many parents wants to give their children private classes after the
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 because they know how important is child studies and
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 is right approach to improve them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reinforce learning
  • personalized attention
  • student-to-teacher ratios
  • comprehensive coverage
  • academic and non-academic subjects
  • well-rounded development
  • address specific weaknesses
  • grade improvement
  • performance in exams
  • leisure time
  • burnout
  • educational opportunities
  • socio-economic disparity
  • over-scheduling
  • balanced approach
  • after-school programs
  • weekend tutoring
  • additional practice
  • constructive criticism
  • holistic growth
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