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Nowadays modern gadgets are widely used by young people and the use of these products reduces their creativity. Do you agree or disagree?

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The
use
 of contemporary gadgets
by
Suggestion
of
the youngers
Suggestion
the young
the younger
the youngest
 is increasing nowadays. Excessive
use
 of these devices mitigate the level of creativity.
This
 essay agrees with
this
 statement because gadgets are used to solve all the problems, from minor to major ones without the active participation of users. To embark upon, artificial intelligences are widely used in each sector for most of the purposes to solve diverse problems. Young people
use
 electronic devices in each sector to solve their
hinderances
be a hindrance or obstacle to
hinders
. Youths are easily admired by the modern devices and
use
 it in various ways as their needs. These gadgets help to solve the problems with less effort, so they apply it to get rid of all the difficulties.
For instance
, almost all the students
use
calculator
Suggestion
calculators
a calculator
the calculator
 to solve numerical problems and do not
use
 their brain
actively
Suggestion
active
activity
.
Moreover
, these devices do not involve the active participation of the people. One can easily find the answers
of
Suggestion
to
 any questions by using these gadgets without using their mind in a fraction of seconds. These things reduce the inherent ability of people and make them dull, which
finally
 results in lose of their creativity.
For example
, most of the students
use
 electronic devices
such
 as mobiles and laptops to find the answers
of
Suggestion
to
 their questions rather than finding answers by reading books. The
use
 of artificial
intelligent
Suggestion
intelligence
by
Suggestion
of
 the
youngers
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
youngest
 reduces their creativity because they
use
 these devices in each field without the active participation of their brain.
This
 essay agreed with
this
 statement.
Submitted by Bhesh Raj Verma on

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