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Some people think the government should focus on improving the economy of the country. Other people think the government should focus on social services such as health and education programs. Which statement do you agree with? Explain and provide examples to support your opinion.

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It is believed that government focus should be on economy
improvement
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, whereas, others think social services
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 as health and education systems are more important to be focused on. I agree to focus on the economic
system
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, and I will talk about my reasons.
Firstly
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, economic
system
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 is a significant element for developing country and should be priority to work on it, because it is about balance between people’s income and their expenses and ease their life and no more homeless exists. All these features are related to a great economy.
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, if an economical
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 is formulated and implemented in the country, people have jobs to fulfil their basic needs of food, clothing, and house,
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, there is enough resources to develop other social services.
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, concentration on economic should be prioritised.
Secondly
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,
economic
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the economic system
system
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 has a cycle that
need
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needs
 to be
work
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working
 well to have
constant
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constantly
improve
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improved
.
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, by keeping focus on economic, and
improvement
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, nations can think about
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
, sports, entertaining, socialising and saving that allows them to make come true their wishes,
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, marriage and wedding party.
Moreover
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,
this
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 circle brings stability to
economic
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the economic system
system
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 and influence other aspects of
people life
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a person's life
person's life
peoples' life
such
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 as their physical and mental health.
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 why economy
improvement
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 is vital. In conclusion, having an effective economic
system
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 is a fundamental of developing a country and has priority to social services. Since, it paves the way to have a better life for the whole nation and continual
improvement
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 that lead to have a better social services as well.
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