the only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#road #safety #punishments #offenses

It is true that hard punishments can increase road safety. But, I believe it

can not

cannot

be the only way and we need more different solutions. I

am not really agree

Suggestion

do not really agree

to just stricter

punishment

Firstly

this

kind of

punishment

is temporary and we need some ways that decline offenders forever. Society needs some kind of penalty which persuade drivers to avoid from being a dangerous driver. To illustrate more, we need heavy fine like confiscation of driving license or

punishment

like bringing drunk drivers to prison for a short time. It will be memorable for offenders and probably they never endanger other

people

Suggestion

person's

life.

Secondly

, the way I look at

this

issue is government can use some

difference

Suggestion

different

ways.

For example

, they can install

speed camera

Suggestion

speed cameras

a speed camera

the speed camera

in highways. It

force

Suggestion

forces

has forced

drivers to decrease their speed and by

this

case the measures of accident will decline.

On the other hand

, more attendance of police officers can be effective and offending drivers avoid of driving speedy or dangerous. In conclusion, I

am not agree

Suggestion

don't agree

do not agree

have not agreed

with

this

statement that strict

punishment

can improve

roads

Suggestion

road

safety. Of course it can be one

reason but

Accept comma addition

reason, but

it can not be the only way.

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