the only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is true that hard punishments can increase road safety. But, I believe it

can not

cannot

be the only way and we need more different solutions. I

am not really agree

Suggestion

do not really agree

to just stricter

punishment

Use synonyms

Firstly

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this

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kind of

punishment

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is temporary and we need some ways that decline offenders forever. Society needs some kind of penalty which persuade drivers to avoid from being a dangerous driver. To illustrate more, we need heavy fine like confiscation of driving license or

punishment

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like bringing drunk drivers to prison for a short time. It will be memorable for offenders and probably they never endanger other

people

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person's

life.

Secondly

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, the way I look at

this

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issue is government can use some

difference

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different

ways.

For example

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, they can install

speed camera

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speed cameras

a speed camera

the speed camera

in highways. It

force

Suggestion

forces

has forced

drivers to decrease their speed and by

this

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case the measures of accident will decline.

On the other hand

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, more attendance of police officers can be effective and offending drivers avoid of driving speedy or dangerous. In conclusion, I

am not agree

Suggestion

don't agree

do not agree

have not agreed

with

this

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statement that strict

punishment

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can improve

roads

Suggestion

road

safety. Of course it can be one

reason but

Accept comma addition

reason, but

it can not be the only way.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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.In many countries, the number of people suffering from stress is increasing. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to tackle it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.