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the only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#road #safety #punishments #offenses
It is true that hard punishments can increase road safety. But, I believe it
can not
can not
cannot
 be the only way and we need more different solutions. I
am not really agree
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do not really agree
 to just stricter
punishment
.
Firstly
,
this
 kind of
punishment
 is temporary and we need some ways that decline offenders forever. Society needs some kind of penalty which persuade drivers to avoid from being a dangerous driver. To illustrate more, we need heavy fine like confiscation of driving license or
punishment
 like bringing drunk drivers to prison for a short time. It will be memorable for offenders and probably they never endanger other
people
Suggestion
person's
 life.
Secondly
, the way I look at
this
 issue is government can use some
difference
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different
 ways.
For example
, they can install
speed camera
Suggestion
speed cameras
a speed camera
the speed camera
 in highways. It
force
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forces
has forced
 drivers to decrease their speed and by
this
 case the measures of accident will decline.
On the other hand
, more attendance of police officers can be effective and offending drivers avoid of driving speedy or dangerous. In conclusion, I
am not agree
Suggestion
don't agree
do not agree
have not agreed
 with
this
 statement that strict
punishment
 can improve
roads
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road
 safety. Of course it can be one
reason but
Accept comma addition
reason, but
 it can not be the only way.
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