Many students take part-time jobs whilst studying in university. Is it a good or bad idea?

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Nowadays, it's common that students do part-time jobs along with their studies.In my opinion, it is better to

leorn

gain knowledge or skills

learn

lean

new skills in university and practice these skills in

job

Suggestion

a job

Firstly

, the foremost beneficial part is that by starting the job during college studies introduce the person in the real world and

this

will teach them some expertise which would be helpful in the future.

Moerevor

in addition

Moreover

, there are many people who are doing part-time jobs with their studies become more

knowledgable

highly educated; having extensive information or understanding

knowledgeable

. In my

opinion

Accept comma addition

opinion, this

this

type of characteristics not only welcomed by many of the employers, but

also

give

opportunity

Suggestion

an opportunity

to employees to start their career after graduating from university.

Secondly

, when you work you get money and part-time jobs during study courses help learners to become mature and paying for own expenses.

Hovever

Suggestion

However

, research conducted shows that most of the students who involved in the working atmosphere must be able to perform well in their studies. But one of the main things that you do in university or in

job

Suggestion

the job

are

metting

a formally arranged gathering

meeting

melting

mating

with different people and learning from each other. In conclusion. I believe that earning at an early age is

good idea but

Suggestion

a good idea, but

a good idea but

the most important things are features and experience which would be definitely paramount for your future career.

Submitted by Erik Barsegyan on Mon Jul 13 2020

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Many students take part-time jobs whilst studying in university. Is it a good or bad idea?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Some people think that we should replace old buildings and houses in cities with more modern buildings. Other people think we should protect old buildings. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people think that it is more important to plant trees in open areas of town and cities than to build more housing . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Overall, men are more satisfied with local conditions than women.