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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Undoubtedly, in recent decade there is a considerable expenditure of advertisings of goods which influence of the power of advertisement, but not to the real demand of these goods. As for me, I particularly support
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 following essay will point out some arguments and strive to write up my personal view. To commence with, in a current time, there are many ways of advertising comparatively for a decade from now, which can back up fast and furious worldwide prevalent. As a great deal of specialists considers that modern advertising increase solely the power where the duty of advertisements is made up of influencing the real demands of the community. As an instance, some the best companies in sport industry subside a huge amount of money on their advertising just in order to make themselves wildly acclaimed to the world, but their main aim is to produce comfortable and well-designed goods.
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. As an instance, internet marketing is one of the best ways of advertising goods to the some afield nations. One of the best internet marketing companies is “Ali Express”, which is well known for its quality and velocity of deliveries. Having commented above information and coming into conclusion, despite some drawbacks of advertising, the merits can outweigh disadvantages, and will contribute to more human beings.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer behavior
  • perceived need
  • lifestyle aspirations
  • brand image
  • prestige
  • psychological techniques
  • scarcity
  • social proof
  • celebrity endorsements
  • technological advancements
  • product innovations
  • emerging consumer needs
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