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Many cities around the world these days are becoming more and more polluted. Why is this happening? What solutions can you suggest?

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In the contemporary world,
Pollution
 covers all the parts of the world. The people are a vital reason behind
this
 matter. Predominantly, The human population have been increased an enormous density compare with the old century.
Pollution
 could be controlled and monitored by the
government
 and it depends on the
country
 management. It is likely to discriminate between the countries
such
 as Low development
country
, Under development
country
, Developed
country
.
Pollution
 can be classified into several categories
such
 as Air
pollution
, Water
pollution
, Road
pollution
.
For instance
, India is the
first
 largest population in the world compare with the landscape. There are places well maintained by society and as well as the general public. Even though, certain areas were caused by severe
pollution
Accept comma addition
pollution, such
such
 as rivers, tourist spots, public roads. Those places were covered by wastrels
such
 as Plastic bags and wastages which have not vanished at all. The reason for
this
 is that human's etiquette. Extensively, Those people have not educated and followed the guidelines. It creates a serious deficit to human. In my opinion, The
government
 should be taking action all over the areas which had affected severely by people. The
government
 intends to get rid of wastrels and surveillance of those areas of
government
 staff. They must be imposed a penalty those who have not complied a rule. In conclusion, As discussed above stated that
pollution
 could be controlled completely in certain countries,
For example
- The United States of America, The United Arab Emirates, Australia, The United Kingdom and European countries have met those areas because of strict rules and regulations.
Thus
, Those countries made a decision that how to clear and maintain the unpolluted
country
 with the support of the public.
Otherwise
, They have not accomplished their goals. Eventually, The
country
 would be clean and tidy
pollution
.
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