Some people think that children should learn how to compete but others think that children should be taught to cooperate to become more useful adults. Express some reasons for both views and give your own opinions.

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Raising a competitive or cooperative child is arguable topic. Peoples have many different
perspective
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perspectives
about
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on
that topic. Cooperations comes with
competitional
of or involving computation or computers
computational
solutions,
cooperation
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encourages to sharing
somethings
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some things
. Competitions has a big role in
humankinds
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humankind's
history. When we came to
world
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the world
, we
competited
compete for something; engage in a contest; measure oneself against others
competed
with animals and try to be alive.
Afterthat
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After that
we discovered
to
being one more than one
two
schools and we want to measure peoples success. These measurements improve to competitions. Competitive children want to be more independent and individual peoples. Generally they intended personal achievements and not sharing their ideas. They want to protect their
independency
freedom from control or influence of another or others
independence
. Sometimes that could be
advantage especially
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advantageous, especially
advantageous especially
advantageously especially
single activities
such
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as single sports, exams
,
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,
dances. In my opinion,
cooperation
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more important than competitions. Companies families and teams
has
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have
a big role in our life. İn
addition these
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addition, these
groups lives with
cooperation
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.
Cooperation
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isn't only need
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hasn't only needed
our independent working
skills but
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skills, but
also
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our social and
organization
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organizational
skills. Some researches
says
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say
that Job
lifes
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life's
succes
the place where something begins, where it springs into being
sources
success
rely on our social skills almost 80 percent ratio. Social skills rely on our
cooperation
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abilities. Being
cooperative person
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a cooperative person
is more complicated and difficult thing. For these reasons being cooperative more important than
competitive
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competition
. I believe cooperative
clidren
a young person of either sex
children
will save and change the world.
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