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What are the main effects of modern technology on our health and possible solutions of them

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In recent days
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,
modern
technology
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 is thought to have an influence on people's lives negatively as well as having some good points Modern
technology
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 has been spreading to every piece of our life and has a great influence on our
health
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 inevitably which is mostly negative. Even it is likely to say that modern
technology
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 triggers some
health
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 problems
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that
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is there
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is, there
 are many other effects of modern
technology
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 on our
health
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 with possible solutions. Many
health
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 problems today may be caused by modern
technology
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.
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, using social media is a common hobby for many people
nowadays so
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nowadays, so
 face to face activities
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 as sports are less popular.
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,
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ready meals are easy to buy,
hence
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 people don't cook fresh
food
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 any more. Because office jobs involve too much time working with
computer
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computers
the computer
, people can develop wrist problems or back pain.Another effect of modern
technology
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 on our
health
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 is that
people
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People
 in the street listen to music through headphones.
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, they cannot hear cars coming and may get run over. More
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children spend too much time sitting playing video games.
which
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Which
 leads to that they do not move enough and they become overweight. Though there are serious effects of modern
technology
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 on
community’s
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a community’s health
the community’s health
health
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, some solutions can be suggested to deal with the negative aspects of
technology
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. /
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, there are many ways to deal with the problems caused by modern
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. It might be given a variety of
presentation
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presentations
 regarding to effect of modern
technology
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’s handicaps by school directors, municipalities or social organization to raise awareness in public.
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, people should be informed about avoiding packet
food
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 and fast
food
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 and the importance to prefer cooking fresh
food
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 and eating healthy. Regarding children, families should encourage their children to be active and take up doing exercise. In conclusion,
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 modern
technology
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 affects people’s life sometimes positively,
this
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 may lead to a number of
health
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 problems from getting overweight to having an accident on the road.
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, if
we personally
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we, personally
, and the government take precautions against the negative effects,
the
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The
 problems can be overcome easily.
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