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Some people think that to produce a happier society is to ensure that there is only a small difference on the earnings of the richest and the poorest members. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #society #difference #earnings #members
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At the outset of the new millennium, there has been a fierce debate over the concern that
country
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's success is completely dependent on economic progress. Whereas, there are other factors
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 which contributes in
development
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the development
 of the
country
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. All the aspects would be scrutinized in the below paragraphs. It is irrefutable to say that economic progress is the indispensable need for any
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 to grow.
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, the international trade business caters the most economically and adds
one
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 in a developed
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. Better the trade and international relations among the countries better the situation of a
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 is.
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, financial
growth
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also
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 helps in leading a society and prevents unemployment.
Finance sector
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The finance sector
 is
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one
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 of the major aspect in counting economic
growth
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.
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, economic
growth
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also
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 has a great impact on health and well being of the nation.
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, there are
plethora
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a plethora
 of other factors which adds up in
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growth
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the growth
 of a nation. Paradoxically, the other factors like education, minority sector, environmental issues are
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 the
one
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 which sum up in economic
growth
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. Better the educational facilities, better will be the youth of the nation and
future
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the future
. As it is always said that youth is the future of the
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, so we should always give them the best of education to lead the world.
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, giving
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a strong liking
preference
 to minority sector
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 leads a better society.
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, infrastructure facilities and other environmental issues
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 caters in economic
growth
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. To recapitulate, there are
numerous factor
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numerous factors
a numerous factor
 in
success
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the success
 of a
country
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.
Economic
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Economist
Economics
 is
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 of the major
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one but
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one, but
 we should
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 develop the other factors
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 to become a successful
country
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 in the world.
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