Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

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In today’s world, serving long sentences in prison is considered as an effective measure to rehabilitate people who committed serious crimes.

However

Accept space

there are a large proportion of them

reoffend

cause to feel resentment or indignation

offend

crimes after being punished. In

this

essay, I will propose some solutions to solve

this

problem.

Firstly

, one of the biggest reasons that some people commit crimes after being released from prison is that they do not have any job related skills.

That is

to say, they are often rejected by employers because they lack of job experience compare to other applicants and

therefore

, they don’t have enough income to

fulfill

put in effect

fulfil

their basic needs.

As a result

, many people choose to commit petty crimes

such

as robbery and shoplifting in order to survive. The government should arrange more vocational training for prisoners and teach them more necessary knowledge which would

be definitely needed

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definitely be needed

in their future lives.

This

would hopefully help those people who want to start a new life in

this

society. Another reason why some people couldn’t be rehabilitated is that some serious offenders

such

as serial killers often have psychological issues and they couldn’t control their minds and

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

In other words

, it is impossible for them to have normal relationship with people and to fit into the society if they are cured psychologically. The government should administer more psychiatrists or consultants in the current prison system to deal with some criminals’ mental health problems. All in all, there is no doubt that

this

problem is extremely urgent. In my opinion, we can decrease the number of people who

reoffend

(used of persons and their behavior) cultivated and genteel

refined

by teaching them useful lessons and give them more care.

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

recidivism
rehabilitation programs
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