Many offenders commit more crimes after serving their first punishment. Why is this happening, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem?

In today’s world, serving long sentences in prison is considered as an effective measure to rehabilitate people who committed serious crimes.
However
,
Accept space
,
there are a large proportion of them
reoffend
cause to feel resentment or indignation
offend
crimes after being punished. In
this
essay, I will propose some solutions to solve
this
problem.
Firstly
, one of the biggest reasons that some people commit crimes after being released from prison is that they do not have any job related skills.
That is
to say, they are often rejected by employers because they lack of job experience compare to other applicants and
therefore
, they don’t have enough income to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their basic needs.
As a result
, many people choose to commit petty crimes
such
as robbery and shoplifting in order to survive. The government should arrange more vocational training for prisoners and teach them more necessary knowledge which would
be definitely needed
Suggestion
definitely be needed
in their future lives.
This
would hopefully help those people who want to start a new life in
this
society. Another reason why some people couldn’t be rehabilitated is that some serious offenders
such
as serial killers often have psychological issues and they couldn’t control their minds and
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
.
In other words
, it is impossible for them to have normal relationship with people and to fit into the society if they are cured psychologically. The government should administer more psychiatrists or consultants in the current prison system to deal with some criminals’ mental health problems. All in all, there is no doubt that
this
problem is extremely urgent. In my opinion, we can decrease the number of people who
reoffend
(used of persons and their behavior) cultivated and genteel
refined
by teaching them useful lessons and give them more care.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recidivism
  • rehabilitation programs
  • social stigma
  • ex-convicts
  • reintegration
  • support systems
  • mental health issues
  • addiction problems
  • criminal networks
  • incarceration
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