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some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. others value quality of work above appearance.

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These days most of the companies think that their staffs play a major role in their business so they argue about their dressing and believe that members should be well- dressed like fashion models which has promoted in the society.
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, some of the other employers consider how to improve their performance
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 of workers styles.
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 is to aspect of discussing. In the related to the job's field, styles and the mod have its own significant influence in the customer's choice and even it affects in their image of justice about the companies work. For
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 reason most of the workers who work directly with people
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 as shop Center's staffs, banks and so on, are regulated to wear uniforms. As an example, the appearance of the clothes shop's staff encourages people who have up-to-date the mods and followed the
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 version of them to buy the brands.
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, some organisations which are independent of any fields are mentioned above, most of the time think how to manufacture high quality instruments, how to bring new customer and sell more than before.
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, image a machine factory which has exportation, its technical groups just think about designing by the
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 methods and how to be professional in their field position,
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 of chasing and obeying the
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 stylish. Totally, in my idea the kind of dressing is a personality feature which differs in people. Some of organizations enforce their employees to wear smartly. While for others it is not aimed and their consider to increase the quality of products.
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