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Success in life depends on hard work and determination or on other factors like money and personal appearance. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#success #life #work #determination #factors #money #appearance
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There have been ongoing debates that whether
success
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 relies on rigorous efforts or finance and personality.
the
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The
 general consensus is that being a successful person, everyone has to do a lot of hard
work
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. Other
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, postulate that other factors
such
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 as financial budget and external appearance are
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play
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playing
 a pivotal role
for
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in
 getting
success
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.
Conversly
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Conversely
,
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,
I believe that hard
work
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 is the only key to become
successful person
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a successful person
 because it is a reality of life.
on
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On
 the one hand, some masses think that getting
success
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 is totally reliant on money as well as physical experience.
they
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They
 claim that money has become the basic necessity of life. Affluent people have multifarious occupations,
such
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 as entrepreneurship, doctors and
engineer especially
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engineer, especially
 in developing countries as destitute people are often lagged behind just because of nepotism despite having countless abilities. They
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 deem that there are myriad professions, particularly tinsel world and many more, which are giving more preference to beautiful girls or handsome boys.
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as
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As
 a result, folks consider that
socio-economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
 disparity
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 exist when people try to get jobs.
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on
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On
 the other hand, there is no shadow of doubt that almost all people have to go through pain and anxiety in order to taste the pursuit of
success
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 and happiness. People cannot achieve their ambitions unless they do
work
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 diligently.
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, since it has been rightly said that curiosity Leeds towards
success
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, human beings have to
work
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 hard with perseverance
for
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in
 getting
success
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. Narendra modi, to
site
make reference to
cite
 as an example, is one of the legendary people who was born in destitute family and his father used to sell tea in order to meet
both ends well
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both ends as well
.
by
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By
 doing hard
work
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, he had been become the chief minister of Gujarat before taking The oath of the current prime Minister of India.
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consequently
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Consequently
, working hard paves the way to become a successful person. In conclusion,
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 some masses give more preference to money and external appearance while getting jobs, I fervently believe that hard
work
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, determination and perseverance are the best ways to get
success
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 as hard
work
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 not only ensure the victory but prosperity
also
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.
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