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Some people think that it is better for country’s economy for people to spend money while others believe that it would be better for people to save money. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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A highly controversial issue today relates to how people should manage their budget to help the country’s economy. In
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 essay, I am going to examine
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 question from both points of view, and
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 give my own opinion on the matter. On one side of the argument they are people who argue that the benefits of consuming cash for the good of the state considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing
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 is because of the money circulating effect. It is a general truth that every single governmental force, is empowered by its citizens and their way of spending money.
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, the more they spend the better providence.
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, the intern budget of a country grows and keeps functioning due to the influence of humanity. One good illustration of
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 is when someone does groceries for his house. He needs to spend money to have that food, and that means taxes get to be paid as well, and those taxes go to the benefit of the state.
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, it is possible to make the opposing case. It is often argued that in fact population should keep their wealth away from wasting if they want to help their nation. People often have
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 opinion because of the old system which was very hard for them and persons with no economies had to endure the cruel hunger of that time. A
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 point is
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 considered that whenever their own federation is collapsing,
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 people’s reserves can come in to help and save the day. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance,
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, I feel that humans need to circulate their capital, so the country’s finances go up.
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 is because the economy needs to grow and the only way to do
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 to spend as much as possible.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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