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Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this and how can this problem be overcome?

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One of the most challenging aspects of the 21st century is the difficulty in keeping the balance between work and
life
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. Nowadays,
life
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 has been quite hectic for working professionals. Most of the population is struggling to maintain a successful and comfortable environment in their
workplace
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 and at the same
time
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 spend quality
time
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 with the family. There several factors responsible for
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.
However
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, working on few things will help to overcome
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 issue, which will be cited in the essay below.
To begin
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 with, in
this
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 competitive business environment, it is extremely difficult to survive if we are less ambitious and
hence
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 we spend more
time
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 at the
workplace
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. There are numerous factors causing
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 which includes higher competition in the
workplace
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, income is less than expenses, the burden of responsibilities of home and so on. The current market situation is that the supply of candidate is higher the demand in a job. So in order to ensure their job security employees are forced to spend more
time
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 at the
workplace
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,
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 in turn deducts the
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 they get to spend with their family.
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Secondly in
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Secondly, in
 our culture mostly in a large family only one of them is the earning member and to manage the monthly expenses is extremely hard and
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 he tries to do some overtime to earn more money. Spending overtime
at
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in
 the
workplace
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 will help them to earn more money, but it
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also lead
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also leads
 them to restlessness and other health issues. Unfortunately, nowadays there is a lot of mental and physical health disturbance due to inability to balance work and
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. In order to overcome
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this
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these
 people should have to limit their working hours and need to spend their
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 with their friends and family. The government can
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 need to take various steps
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 as a strict law should be imposed in order to limit the working hours.
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An
 awareness campaign is
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 needed to raise awareness about the risks of overtime and problems faced by the children of working parents. To conclude, keeping a balance between work and personal
life
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 is a huge challenge in
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 competitive world. S everyone should start to think about their personal
life
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.
Submitted by Mubarak Ahmad on

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