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Many people are involved in sports when they are young but stop once they are adults.why do many adults stop doing physical exercise? What can be done about the problem?

Analytically speaking sports play a significant role in every
age
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 group's
lives
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life
.
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,
 now everyone is not interested in playing
games perhaps
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games, perhaps
 only youngsters are showing their interest in different sports
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on
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On
 the other
hand when
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hand, when
 people become
adults they
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adults, they
 lose these activities
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 There are various reasons behind
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this but
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this, but
most important factor
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the most important factor
 is lack of
time
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 Let us discuss
this
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 and its solution. What are the motivational factors which promote adult to play games
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?
 Playing sports at every
age
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 is beneficial for health is surely one explanation
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 It
also
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 increases brain power
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Study
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The study
 shows that those people who play games
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,
 do not face any health problems and perform their duties with an active mind.
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, the problem which specially adults are facing now a days is
time
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 and
second
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 is their responsibilities towards their family
,
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,
 these factors are not allowing them to play different games
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However
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,
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,
 to overcome
this
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 problem adults should have to maintain their
time
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 and take out a few hours for games so that they do not have to face health disease
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 There are some other reasons that do not allow adults to play
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For instance
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 the important fact is that at a young
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age they
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age, they
 were energetic and healthy but due to
age
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 related
disease they
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disease, they
 are no longer able to participate in sports and become lazy
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 In spite of the above fact to become energetic and active is not a difficult task at a young
age
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, one should have to take out
time
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 from his busy schedule so that he becomes active and enthusiastic
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 In conclusion, adults should
also
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 have to participate in sports
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 It is hard for them to take out
time
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 from their busy
hours but
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hours, but
 to become healthy and active they should have to maintain
daily routine
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a daily routine
 so that they can perform well in life
.
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.

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