Many people are involved in sports when they are young but stop once they are adults.why do many adults stop doing physical exercise? What can be done about the problem?

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Analytically speaking sports play a significant role in every

age

group's

lives

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life

However

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now everyone is not interested in playing

games perhaps

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games, perhaps

only youngsters are showing their interest in different sports

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the other

hand when

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hand, when

people become

adults they

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adults, they

lose these activities

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There are various reasons behind

this but

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this, but

most important factor

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the most important factor

is lack of

time

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Let us discuss

this

and its solution. What are the motivational factors which promote adult to play games

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Playing sports at every

age

is beneficial for health is surely one explanation

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also

increases brain power

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Study

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The study

shows that those people who play games

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do not face any health problems and perform their duties with an active mind.

On the other hand

, the problem which specially adults are facing now a days is

time

and

second

is their responsibilities towards their family

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these factors are not allowing them to play different games

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However

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to overcome

this

problem adults should have to maintain their

time

and take out a few hours for games so that they do not have to face health disease

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There are some other reasons that do not allow adults to play

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For instance

the important fact is that at a young

age they

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age, they

were energetic and healthy but due to

age

disease they

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disease, they

are no longer able to participate in sports and become lazy

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In spite of the above fact to become energetic and active is not a difficult task at a young

age

, one should have to take out

time

from his busy schedule so that he becomes active and enthusiastic

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In conclusion, adults should

also

have to participate in sports

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It is hard for them to take out

time

from their busy

hours but

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hours, but

to become healthy and active they should have to maintain

daily routine

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a daily routine

so that they can perform well in life

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2Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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