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The Felix stone has changed a lot between 1967 and 2001. Do you agree with this statement?

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The given picture illustrates the difference of Felix stone between 1967 and 2001. Overall, there was a lot of changing in that
years
Suggestion
year
. Some building had been rebuilt or replaced. Some facilities had added to
this
 area. In 1967, in the North of
this
 area, from East to West, there was a farmland, two shops,
highstreet
Suggestion
high street
 between two shops, a golf course. In the South, from East to West, there was a fish market, marina and pier leading straight to the sea in the south, a café and a
hotel
. These
also
 had some facilities like trees and dunes. In 2001, farmland was replaced for a new
hotel
. That
hotel
 had a swimming pool and two tennis courts. Two shops were combined
to
Suggestion
into
with
 bigger one. The shop
next
 to farmland was replaced for an apartments the land, which had fish market, was rebuilt to private beach. The marina and pier was demolished to create a public beach. The
hotel
 in the southwest was rebuilt and add a car park. Trees were planted more in that direction. The dunes
was reduced
Suggestion
were reduced
 to build wind turbines
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