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Some people think that zoos are cruel and all zoos should be closed. However, others think that zoos are useful for protecting rare animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that zoos are like prisons for animals and they should be closed immediately; the opposite point of view is thanks to zoos many rare species have a chance to be protected and saved.
This
 essay will consider some pros and cons regarding these opinions. It is well known that during
last
decades many
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decades, many
 wild animals became extinct because of human activities. Obviously, we are
bounded
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bound
 to protect
such
 beautiful nature creatures as animals and
such
 method as building zoos seems to be a relevant solution.
However
, it is needed to give
zoos their
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zoos, their
 due: animals can live there in safe bearing offspring and people can take care about them as well.
As a result
, thanks to zoos many rare species have a great opportunity to survive.
On the other hand
, many animals can suffer living in zoos for the following reasons.
Firstly
, nowadays visiting zoos has become as an amazing performance
for
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of
 people and especially for children where they can have a better look at wild animals living there; obviously, visitors disturb them.
Secondly
, it is well known that as usual cages which wild animals are placed in are too small for living.
As a result
, many animals live far from their natural habitats; they are intended to serve visitors as if they were toys. These
days many
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days, many
 wonderful wild animals live in special places called Zoos and some people believe that Zoos are cruel. I could not agree more that keeping animals in Zoos during all their life is like a crime. I strongly believe that
such
 places as National Parks are a good alternative to Zoos and in order to protect animals it is needed to make more Parks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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