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In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can it cause?

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Nowadays a movement away from rural areas has become as a new trend: many people prefer to live in big cities rather than small towns.
However
, there is the question which should be answered: is it a positive or a negative development? In
this
 essay some pros and cons regarding
this
 question will be considered. Obviously, some people from rural areas believe that moving to big cities is a fresh start.
Firstly
, it is a great chance to get an all-round education as well as an appropriate job in the future.
Secondly
, those people who live in big cities have got a wonderful opportunity to spend their leisure time in a big way, because it is well known that there are a lot of cultural, sports and education
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 located in urban areas.
In other words
, as usual, people who are charged with energy to improve their quality of
life
 make a choice to move to urban areas.
On the other hand
,
this
 method causes some difficulties for the following reasons. Obviously, these people who come to a decision to change their
life
 and to move to big cities are
bounded
Suggestion
bound
 to work hard during all their
life
 in order to earn more money, to buy an own house and to bring up children;
as a result
 it is hard or closely impossible for them to find some leisure time to have a rest.
In addition
, many of them have not got
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 relatives as well as friends in new places who can support and help them, offering some advices regarding different
life
 situations. In our modern
life
 people prefer to live in big cities; it is an opportunity to find an ideal job and to follow
independent lifestyle
Suggestion
an independent lifestyle
 that they adore and appreciate a lot. In
conclusion I
Accept comma addition
conclusion, I
 would like to say that
this
 method is quite suitable for some categories of people, but not for everyone.
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