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Some people believe that if people are allowed to work after the age 60, it could cause problems. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that working after the
age
 60 could be a reason of some problems. Obviously, there is the question which should be answered: what
advantages
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the advantages
 and disadvantages of
this
 method?
This
 essay will consider some pros and cons regarding
this
 question.
Nowadays when
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Nowadays, when
such
 complicated areas as IT and telecommunication methods are developed, using the Global Network has become as a new trend.
For instance
, many people have got an opportunity to work sitting at a computer; obviously, some retired people are able to keep working
this
 way.
Thus
, it is needed to give
this
 method its due: it is a great chance for sharp minded and hardworking retired people to earn some money as well as to stay in
community
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the community
.
On the other hand
, working after the
age
 60 could cause some problems for the following reasons.
Firstly
, it is not a secret that retired people need more rest; usually, they are not able to work as productive as
young
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younger
 employees.
Secondly
, it is well known that it is an opportunity to spend more time with family members that people
after
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over
 the
age
 60 adore and appreciate a lot; obviously, they lose
this
 chance if they keep working.
In other words
, it is difficult or closely impossible for old people to keep the same productivity as others;
for example
, after retiring their lifestyle should be changed. There is an opinion that if old people are allowed to continue working there are some problems. I can conclude that retired people as well as employers may face up to some difficulties and working after the
age
 60 is not suitable for everyone.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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