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Some people believe hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable. To what extent do you agree and disagree.

#people #hobbies
Whether hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable, a topic largely controversial and open to subjective bias, depends on personal perspectives. People usually take up hobbies to help them to get out of the monotony of their everyday hustle and bustle.
Therefore
, measurement parameter
such
 as
difficulty level
Suggestion
the difficulty level
 is obsolete. To my understanding, the most important aspect is if a
person
 enjoys doing what she/ he loves. I,
therefore
, disagree with the given statement and aim to present constructive arguments to discuss the pros and cons. Some people may derive masochistic delight by pursuing hobbies that are difficult.
For example
, the practitioners of Parkour, commonly known as tracers, need to have great physical flexibility, strength and some sorts of dare-devil like courage to be able to perform stunts.
Further
 to that, there are risks of injuries associated
to
Suggestion
with
such
 activities. Now if an average
person
 wishes to pursue Parkour as a
hobby
, he/ she will need to attain fitness level
that is
 suitable to carry-out
such
 stunts.
This
 may take months if not years, which is enough to put someone off the course.
Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, it is time consuming and exhausting. Several other examples of
such
 hobbies can be drawn whereby people will just give up because it is difficult to follow, let alone enjoy it to feel reinvigorated. In contrary, hobbies
such
 as gardening, playing musical instruments, running, or even collecting stamps
do not require
Suggestion
does not require
 much
efforts
Suggestion
effort
, yet may bring enormous joys. If someone has enough space for gardening in front of their house or in the back of his / her house and some spare time, he/ she can pursue it as a
hobby
. Yes,
this
 may require some reading to acquire knowledge about plants, but
this
 is the overall purpose of taking up a
hobby
. One can
also
 join clubs to learn from local people and share experiences,
this
 way a
person
 can engage with like-minded people and build up a community.
This
 goes
similarly
 with stamp collecting. People can learn
skills
Suggestion
the skills
 of negotiation and exchange. Most
imporantly
in an important way or to an important degree
importantly
,
form
a giver or sender
from
 the sense of helping others, all through a
hobby
. In
conclusioin
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conclusions
consolation
, an inference can be drawn from the pros and cons of only pursuing hobbies that are difficult to be enjoyable is not always feasible.
Instead
, a
hobby
 should match a
person
's personality, availability, physical capabilities, and sheer enthusiasm, only
then
 the purpose of taking up a
hobby
 can be taken advantage to the fullest.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unique challenge
  • personal growth
  • mastery
  • accomplishment
  • demanding
  • thrill of achievement
  • pastimes
  • fostering
  • sense of community
  • mindfulness
  • stress relief
  • mental break
  • daily stressors
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