Watching a live performance such as a play, concert, or sporting event is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays some people prefer to
joining
Suggestion
join
live activates
such
as
spectacle
or sporting match or
concert
than enjoy some
television
program on TV. In my opinion, I disagree that
television
does not help people who do not have
many
the most common medium of exchange; functions as legal tender
money
for buying a ticket on live activities and they live in
small town
Suggestion
a small town
their country.
First
of all, a person who wants to enjoy a live
concert
or sporting match or
spectacle
must have a lot of
money
for buying a ticket on different activities.
This
means that people who work on small paying work do not have free
money
for watching activities and they can watch these
activities online on
Suggestion
online activities on
television
.
For example
, many people who live in
Russian outback
Suggestion
the Russian outback
do not have
money
for visiting a live
concert
.
Thus
, many people have a chance of watching a new
concert
or sports activity or musical
concert
on the TV in their home. Another point to consider that people who live in small town do not have an opportunity
for
Suggestion
of
going in a big city.
In other words
, the distance between cities has a big amount
kilometers
Suggestion
kilometre
kilometres
that is
why people spent a lot of time moving
in
Suggestion
to
the big city.
For instance
, the distance between Russian cities has bigger
kilometers
a metric unit of length equal to 1000 meters (or 0.621371 miles)
kilometres
than another country
that is
why many people cannot travel often.
Therefore
, people who cannot go to the nearest big city for visiting a
concert
or
spectacle
have the possibility of attending a
concert
while watching online. In conclusion, despite people having a different opinion, I think that
television
gives the possibility of watching online for many people who cannot attend on
concert
or sporting event or
spectacle
and they do not have free
money
for it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immersive experience
  • replicated
  • energy
  • atmosphere
  • sense of community
  • shared excitement
  • unforgettable
  • predictable
  • convenience
  • comfort
  • crowds
  • travel
  • multiple camera angles
  • close-ups
  • replays
  • enhancing
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