Watching a live performance such as a play, concert, or sporting event is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays some people prefer to

joining

Suggestion

join

live activates

such

spectacle

or sporting match or

concert

than enjoy some

television

program on TV. In my opinion, I disagree that

television

does not help people who do not have

many

the most common medium of exchange; functions as legal tender

money

for buying a ticket on live activities and they live in

small town

Suggestion

a small town

their country.

First

of all, a person who wants to enjoy a live

concert

or sporting match or

spectacle

must have a lot of

money

for buying a ticket on different activities.

This

means that people who work on small paying work do not have free

money

for watching activities and they can watch these

activities online on

Suggestion

online activities on

television

For example

, many people who live in

Russian outback

Suggestion

the Russian outback

do not have

money

for visiting a live

concert

Thus

, many people have a chance of watching a new

concert

or sports activity or musical

concert

on the TV in their home. Another point to consider that people who live in small town do not have an opportunity

for

Suggestion

going in a big city.

In other words

, the distance between cities has a big amount

kilometers

Suggestion

kilometre

kilometres

that is

why people spent a lot of time moving

Suggestion

the big city.

For instance

, the distance between Russian cities has bigger

kilometers

a metric unit of length equal to 1000 meters (or 0.621371 miles)

kilometres

than another country

that is

why many people cannot travel often.

Therefore

, people who cannot go to the nearest big city for visiting a

concert

spectacle

have the possibility of attending a

concert

while watching online. In conclusion, despite people having a different opinion, I think that

television

gives the possibility of watching online for many people who cannot attend on

concert

or sporting event or

spectacle

and they do not have free

money

for it.

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