Some people believe that it is better for animals to live freely ,while others think that they would get more benefits if they be kept in some zoos .in this essay both views will be considered.

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some are provoking to free animals for some significant reasons
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animals have their primary rights of freedom as like
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a human
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, it is not moral to use them as an amusement in order to make profits.
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Secondly
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they may
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grant freedom to; free from confinement
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their natural instinct for hunting over times as they receive their daily food
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every day
without experiencing any obstacles which they might have faced in their wild habitat.
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, there are some beneficial aspects in which protecting animals in some zoos
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is useful for mainly two reasons
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In terms of entertaining prospect
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it could be helpful
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as a real source
for students and animal researchers
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way in order to understand their
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attitude
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Some protected
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a particular geographical region of indefinite boundary (usually serving some special purpose or distinguished by its people or culture or geography)
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like those in Africa
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are managed properly to make reproductions
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they would protect the offspring indirectly
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In conclusion
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it is true that animals have their own right to live freely, so it is a wrong idea to keep them in cages,
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they would be better to be protected in zoos in order to survive from their ecological dangers which they face.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • captivity
  • natural habitat
  • artificial enclosures
  • genetic diversity
  • animal welfare
  • conservation efforts
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • education platform
  • breeding programs
  • reintroduction
  • psychological suffering
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