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the charts below show temperature and rainfall in Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate.

the charts below show temperature and rainfall in Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate.
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The graphs compare the
temperature
 and
rainfall
 of
equatorial
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the equatorial
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climate
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climates
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 and
Mediterranean
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the Mediterranean
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climate
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climates
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.
Overall
, it can be seen from the figures that
climate
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the climate
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 in
equatorial
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the equatorial
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 is generally wetter and hotter than that in
Mediterranean
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the Mediterranean
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,
whereas
 the
climate
 in
Mediterranean
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the Mediterranean
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 is cooler and drier. To be specific,
temperature
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the temperature
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 in
equatorial
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the equatorial
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area
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areas
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 is ranging between 24
degree
Celsius
 and 26
degree
Celsius
. The hottest time in
equatorial
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the equatorial
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 region begins in May and ends in July, after which it leveled out in the
next
 few months, followed by a slight
temperature
 drop in November and bottoming out at 23
degree
Celsius
at the end
 of
a
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 year. Meanwhile, the maximum
of
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rainfall
 occurs in December (over 250 cubic
millimeters
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millimetres
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),
while
rainfall
 is generally below 200 from February to October.
On the other hand
, the
temperature
 in
Mediterranean
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the Mediterranean
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 starts at 12
degree
Celsius
 and it experienced
an
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exponential growth, rising to 27
degree
Celsius
 in August after which it dipped to almost 10
degree
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degrees
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Celsius
 in December. The amount of
rainfall
 is relatively low (below 100 cubic
millimeters
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millimetres
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) except
December
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in December
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 and January, being 170
millimeters
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millimetres
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 and 150
millimeters
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 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, rainfall, climate, mediterranean, degree, celsius, millimeters with synonyms.
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