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the charts below show temperature and rainfall in Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate.

the charts below show temperature and rainfall in Equatorial climate and Mediterranean climate.
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The graphs compare the
temperature
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rainfall
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 of
equatorial
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the equatorial
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climate
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climates
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 and
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Mediterranean
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the Mediterranean
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climate
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climates
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.
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, it can be seen from the figures that
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climate
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the climate
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 in
equatorial
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the equatorial
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 is generally wetter and hotter than that in
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Mediterranean
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the Mediterranean
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,
whereas
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 the
climate
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 in
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Mediterranean
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the Mediterranean
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 is cooler and drier. To be specific,
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temperature
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the temperature
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 in
equatorial
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the equatorial
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area
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areas
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 is ranging between 24
degree
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Celsius
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 and 26
degree
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Celsius
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. The hottest time in
equatorial
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 region begins in May and ends in July, after which it leveled out in the
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 few months, followed by a slight
temperature
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 drop in November and bottoming out at 23
degree
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Celsius
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at the end
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 of
a
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the
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 year. Meanwhile, the maximum
of
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rainfall
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 occurs in December (over 250 cubic
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millimeters
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millimetres
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),
while
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rainfall
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 is generally below 200 from February to October.
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, the
temperature
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 in
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Mediterranean
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the Mediterranean
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 starts at 12
degree
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Celsius
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 and it experienced
an
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exponential growth, rising to 27
degree
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Celsius
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 in August after which it dipped to almost 10
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degree
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degrees
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Celsius
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 in December. The amount of
rainfall
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 is relatively low (below 100 cubic
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millimeters
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millimetres
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) except
December
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in December
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 and January, being 170
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millimeters
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millimetres
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 and 150
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millimeters
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 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, rainfall, climate, mediterranean, degree, celsius, millimeters with synonyms.
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