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scientists and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artists? to what extent do you agree?

#scientists #technology #experts #society #musicians #artists
In
this
 modern world, it is true that science and technology proven to be more beneficial than any other categories like singers
,
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,
painters or actors.I completely agree with that and
this
esay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 will discuss about the importance of experts
of
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in
 these fields.
To begin
 with, currently
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the world is facing many serious issues, which
wer
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
wear
where
 not faced previously by
human
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humanity
. To overcome with
such
 problems
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,
scientists play a vital role rather than any
musians
someone who plays a musical instrument (as a profession)
musicians
nuisance
 or artists.Take an example of
issue
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an issue
the issue
issues
 like Covid-19, almost every nation in the globe are suffering from
this
 pandemic and unfortunately
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still no proper vaccine or treatment are available in any countries.
However
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,
scientists are
continuesly
seemingly without interruption
continually
continuously
 researching and experimenting
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,
in order to find a right way to fight with
this
 cause.
Thus
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they valued more
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,
as they
constantly working
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are constantly working
constantly work
 on saving human lives. Another major
chalenge
take exception to
challenge
challenges
 faced by human is pollution, which leads to
disasteral
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disaster
disastrous
 effect on the environment
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,
caused by increased
number
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numbers
 in the
usuage
the act of using
usage
 of automobiles. Researches
shows
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show
 that a harmful
gascalled
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gas called
gaseoline
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gasoline
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,
which produced from
vechicles
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicles
 has adverse effect on the nature.In order to find some solutions and alternative for
such
 issue, technological experts contributed to a great deal.
For instance
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,
they are researching on battery operated machines
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,
which are proven to be less harmful to
environment
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the environment
 than other fossil fuels
such
 as petrol and
disesl
an internal-combustion engine that burns heavy oil
diesel
.They believe to change oil engines with battery operated one
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,
to ensure more safety for
environment
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the environment
. From the above description, it is clear that scientists and experts in technology
plays
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play
 a significant role in the development and saving human lives
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,
thus
 become more valuable in
modern world
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the modern world
 than any other area.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valued
  • modern society
  • scientists
  • technology experts
  • musicians
  • artists
  • reliance
  • scientific advancements
  • practical benefits
  • driving economic growth
  • daily lives
  • culture
  • human emotions
  • express ideas
  • provoke thought
  • spiritual well-being
  • emotional well-being
  • preserving cultural heritage
  • subjective nature
  • diversity
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