some people are convinced that mature age employees are beneficial to a company. Others think that younger employees contribute more and hence are more beneficial to a company. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The table below shows the percentage of money adults and kids used in four common items in the UK in 1998. Overall, the percentages of
income
spent varied in all the categories, with men spending the greatest proportion in
food
while women spent the lowest percentages on videos and electronic equipment. Men spent 50% percent of their
income
merely
in
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on
food
, two times more than women. The biggest expense for adults was
also
in
food
,
however they
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however, they
only spent 1.25% of their
income
in videos. The proportion of music was the same for all the categories at 19% except
from
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for
boys and children.
Boys
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The boys
spent the highest proportions of
income
in electronic equipment and videos, 40% and 28% respectively. There was a significant
different
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difference
between boys and girls, while boys were spending 40% of their
income
in electronic equipment, girls were only spending 8%. For girls the most popular item was music and they spent the lowest proportion of
income
in
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on
food
compared with the other groups.
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