Since the beginning of the 20th century, the number of endangered species has increased significantly and we have witnessed more mass extinctions in this period than in any other period of time. State some reasons for this and provide possible solutions.

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During the beginning of the 20th century

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Most of the wildlife species are being at risk,

Infact mortality rate

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the Infact mortality rate

is more compared to the birth rate.

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the future

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would be witnessing most of animals in movies or pictures.The reason behind

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extinctions is because of animal poaching,

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however hunting

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however, hunting

animals illegally should be strictly prohibited,

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in fact

there must be a proper jurisdiction act passed

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to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits

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Avoid

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circumstances.

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a strict action should be taken against people who regularly involve themselves in trapping the innocent species, Habit is an unacceptable reason for humans who choose to state

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although

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there are several individuals infact even politicians are involved in

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merciless action, A strong judgement should be passed over

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people in order to save the animals

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we have only few tigers left in our country if the situation persists to be the same,

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we loose them like how we lost dinosaurs.

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the governing body

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that's

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strictly

in saving our

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a collection of live animals for study or display

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, If relevant action is taken on people irrespective of caste

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religion and sex

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can be many changes which can be implemented in order to save

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creatures.In my point of view those who kill animals

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try to eradicate them completely they should be sentenced to a punishment where others would have a

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thought to repeat the same. In

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a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration

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to be seen and treated on humanity basis

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as they deserve

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not in captivity.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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endangered species
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