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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, thing that change always are good thinks. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Changes are always present in our lives. Some see them like the opportunities and
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 see them like problems that they have to elude. In my opinion, the changes are great challenges to build our dreams.
This
 essay will discuss both
point
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points
 of views. Sedentary lifestyle always became a bad habit for health. Due to, people do not exercise, sleep
overtime
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over time
 and eat a lot. To illustrate, eighty percent of the people who stay at home have overweight.
As a result
, they have high cholesterol, high blood pressure, osteoporosis and diabetes.
Consequently
, thousands die due to cardiovascular diseases. Because of they do not want to
change
 their daily routine regarding
to work
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working
 out and food.
On the other hand
, there are people who take the
change
 to improve their quality of
life
. To achieve
this
 dream,
entrepreneur
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the entrepreneur
need
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needs
 more money to buy a house, to improve their children´s education and to travel around the world.
For instance
, a worker normally works eight hours per
day but
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day, but
 they do not earn a lot of money.
However
, some try to
change
 their old jobs and create new businesses.
Therefore
, they begin to earn more money to enjoy
life
. It is evident that modifying a habit bring countless advantages to reach our goals. To conclude, each person
have
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has
 to decide between accepting changes or having a monotonous
life
. To my way of thinking, the
second
 option is better for everyone. Because, a successful
life
always demand
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always demands
 a strong
change
 in our
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 and decisions.
Submitted by Mauricio Vargas on

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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