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You are going to attend a training course at a college in another country. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the College Accommodation Officer. In your letter: • Explain your situation • Describe the accommodation you require • Say when and how long you will need the accommodation

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Dear Sr. Charles I hope you are doing well. My name is Mauricio Vargas and I am a student of Diploma Project Manager in Sydney´s Campus.
However
, I am going to participate in a course
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 Financial Management in Perth.
Therefore
, I am writing to request a habitation due to I do not have any familiar living there. I would like a single room because I am an
organize
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 person and I do not like to share my personal space with anyone.
Moreover
, I would like that my habitation
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 a desk to study and a fridge to keep food and drinks.
In addition
, I would
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have a book shell for my book collection because I use to read
en
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 my free time. The course will
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 Monday 31rd May, but I need to arrive one day ago to finish my enrollment. I will use the room for two
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 because the course will spend
this
 time in our training. Thanks in advance Mauricio
Submitted by Mauricio Vargas on

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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