Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Upbringing of Children by various methods is continuing to be a controversial issue among people. While some people think that, competition is very important in the development of children, another group of people thinks that, children should be taught the values of cooperation rather than clash. Both the views possess some benefits and some disadvantages which will be discussed in

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very easy. In the beginning, It is undeniable that competition is necessary in some fields.

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, in individual sports games, in which we have to compete with other individuals in order to win and people have to choose one single winner.

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make pupils to work hard so as to achieve rewards and healthy trial can maintain the excitement and zeal in the work.

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may find the session too boring to persuade. On the flip side, Sometimes rivalry can convert into the obsession of wining and it can make children to choose inappropriate paths to compete

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as, cheating.

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, Cooperative behaviour is much more needed in children as it can teach tolerance, respect, exchange of help etc. Sometimes a child could be demoralized due to his/her continuing failure in some competitive activity despite of his/her constant efforts. They

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opine that the lessons learned in childhood lasts for the entire life and the children who always compete would do so for the rest of their lives and

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would include both the positive and negative competitions. To conclude, in accordance with my view, both cooperation and race is essential for children in their own place. The guardians have to choose one appropriately according to the situation and context in order to ensure their kids learn correct moral values and ethics.

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