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Telecommuting refers to workers doing their jobs from home for part of each week and communicating with their office using computer technology. Telecommuting is growing in many countries and is expected to be common for most office workers in the coming decades. How do you think society will be affected by the growth of telecommuting?

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Nowadays, it is seen in many countries
work
 from
home
 is the new trend. Many companies provide huge packages for working from
home
, whereas, few companies provide a single day in a week, and others still believe that working from office is the only culture that should be followed.
This
 essay will discuss about how the society will get affected by the increase in telecommuting. For the past few months due to corona virus, telecommuting is the most common thing happening
for instance
, in IT companies. The growth of telecommuting will not only help the employees, but
also
, help the nature to heal. The reduction in traffic will improve the air
quality so
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quality, so
 much, that it will break the records of the past few years. The water bodies will be filtered automatically from the waste from huge factories delivered in the rivers and lakes.
In addition
, the workers will start giving more time to their children and help their wife in doing the household
work
. As it has proved that telecommuting has more advantages, the issues caused by
this
 can
also
 not be ignored. Working from
home
 will make the employees more of a lazy lamb
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 being an energetic worker. People will start suffering from obesity and many other dietary issues. Working long hours on laptops in the same posture will affect their eyesight and create back problems. The social life of an individual will
also
 be reduced. To conclude, the society should not only get their
work
 done from their homes completely, but they should
also
 visit their offices for the mandatory
work
. The companies should make the working hours and place so comfortable that the employees start enjoying their
work
 doing in office as well as their
home
.
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