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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad?

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All over the world, people's interest in moving abroad is increasing day by day in order to get higher education or to get better opportunities for themselves and their families.
However
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, there are both the advantages and disadvantages associated
to
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with
 it. In
this
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 essay, the attraction of living abroad and the
challenges to it will
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challenges it will
 be discussed. On the one hand, one of the main
advantage
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advantages
 of heading overseas is personal growth, settling in another
country
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 is having a financial
benefits
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benefit
.
For instance
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, when a
person
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 leaves a
county
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
 like Pakistan where the currency is devalued, and move to
developed
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developed countries
a developed country
country
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 like Canada, where the exchange rate is much higher, resulting in the increase in the source of income of a
person
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.
Minimum wage rate
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The minimum wage rate
 of developed countries is much higher than the rate of developing and undeveloped countries, attracting a
person
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 to move
onto
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into
 the developed countries.
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, moving to another
country
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 provides them the opportunities to learn different languages, cultures, and give them multiple job opportunities, which is helpful for themselves and for their families in terms of having a better
life-style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
.
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, while having so many benefits of moving
abroad there
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abroad, there
 are some setbacks as well, homesickness, and relationship pressure are the major problems, people leaving their hometown.
For example
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, when a
person
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 leaves his
country
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, he has to leave his friends and family and moved to abroad alone, the feeling of loneliness bring anxiety in the
person
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 which lead him into homesickness.
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, when a
person
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 moves to another
country
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 he has to face the cultural differences, language barriers, timing difference, which
sometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
 leads the
person
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 to feel isolated in the
country
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 where he moved recently. In conclusion, while there are both advantages and disadvantages of leaving your
country
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, according to the experience of different people, after some time the
person
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 starting to feel comfortable in the
country
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 he moved.
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