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Some educationalists think that international exchange visits will benefits teenagers at the school. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Some tutors thought that international exchange visits will be beneficial for youngsters at the school. Advantages outweighing the disadvantages as they become responsible as compared to youth stayed in the hometown, they
also
 have the opportunities to learn different languages.
However
, there is a slim chance that they are not focusing enough on their studies due to homesickness. On the one hand, youth who visits foreign countries to study at the schools are more likely to become responsible as compared to the ones who stayed at home for studying, the reason for
that is
 they have to do their work for examples, they have to do their laundry, cooking, and cleaning, which enhance their sense of responsibility.
Furthermore
, they have a chance to learn different languages and cultures as they get a chance to meet students from different countries.
Moreover
, they have the opportunity to earn foreign work experience which will help them in the future when they are seeking a job after school.
On the other hand
, few students
are not focusing
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are not focused
 on their studies properly due to homesickness, teens who have many siblings are more likely to feel loneliness which is causing
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the lack
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 of attention in studies. Another disadvantage is that few youngsters from underdeveloped countries start disliking their own country when they visit developed countries, as they comparing their country with the one they visit,
for example
, their standard of living, their lifestyle, technology gap between the two countries, which demotivate them to return to their hometown. In conclusion, while there are some disadvantages of international exchange visits, the advantages are far outweighing the disadvantages.
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