We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is
this
dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits? As the world has been expanding and new technologies keep advancing our dependence on these has reached a higher level, where for basic requirements we depend on them. The
use
of computers has been seen in all
fields whether
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fields, whether
it be in
arts
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the arts
or education. Most people question
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
credibility, are these machines hovering over our lives or are they a means of purpose. We shall discuss these in the essay with relevant examples. The invention of these devices has had an impact on our lives. From
the most simplest
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the simplest
the most simple
things to
launging
the act of moving a newly built vessel into the water for the first time
launching
rockets need them. They have made our lives
easier
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easier, for
for instance
, the
use
of electronic systems in the banking sector
have generated
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has generated
facilities like virtual banking which can be done from
any where
at or in or to any place
anywhere
, does not require the person’s presence. Not only is it of
use
here but
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here, but
can help while in navigation, the maps developed by
diffferent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
software are very efficient in locating a particular area or
palce
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a place
place
ona
located at or attached to
on
a map.
This
is a growing speciality and it is expected that going forward
this
will continue to be the flourishing industry of the centuries ahead. To quote one, the developments made in
nano technology
the branch of engineering that deals with things smaller than 100 nanometers (especially with the manipulation of individual molecules)
nanotechnology
and its application in the medical line,
this
could help in repairing damaged cells in the body where it is not possible to reach even by the surgeon. Though it has entered the market, the doctors prefer to proceed with the
coventional
following accepted customs and proprieties
conventional
method. Even
then
it could take the role sooner than expected.
However
, one of the biggest concern that the public has expressed is the rise in cybercrime, the
use
of different programs and websites that expose a larger section of the society to various forms of sources who expolit
this
information for their own gains, social media is one platform where personal details acquired are used by hackers to threaten by exposing secrets. Many reports provide evidence of
such
happenings and
this
leaves us vulnerable to
such
dangers.
Nonetheless
, the advances made in
this
subject are not to go down and
this
will continue to prosper,
however
, there can be improvement in the way one’s data is stored, protected and using similar tech these issues can be resolved but it is unlikely our dependence on them will reduce,
instead
we need to make efforts in dealing with
such
situations.
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