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In some countries at secondary or high school, there may be two streams of study: academic or vocational. What are the advantages for students and society of putting students into two streams at the age of fifteen?

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In several countries at college or University, there might be academic or vocational of
study
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 to give a classic route for younger learners and it can lead the students to understand or choose what they like and assure the evidence, freedom correlation between society and future owners. On the one hand, some evidence claims that the process of students' learning strategy should be due to their desire. Because, It is more handy for both the government and student requirements to regulate the two different streams of
study
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, the students who are more concerned about giving a lecture, speeches in front of the public may be unsuitable for them If they
study
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 in scientific branch, while there some convenient professions are available for them
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 as carpenter, chef, mechanic, plumber and etc.
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, the public needs are covered and fulfilling by a stream of
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 and its accomplished students on their share.
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, It may be more useful for instructors and professors who are sophisticated and brainy If they teach all the students who are interested in science rather than the mixture of half followed occasional and half supported academically.
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 that, dividing the students into two streams successful masters for the public necessities. In view of during the
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 period the subjects and materials are based on student interest and the students can learn more quickly and sufficiently it. In conclusion, the system of high school and secondary schools in some countries
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 as teaching academically or professionally can be more profitable for the society and the students at the same level and It should be expanded through the globe.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alignment with student interests
  • career aspirations
  • higher satisfaction and motivation
  • tailored education
  • theoretical knowledge
  • college preparation
  • practical skills
  • direct entry into the workforce
  • dropout rates
  • vocational training
  • traditional academic environment
  • skilled workforce
  • industry and trade roles
  • boosting the local economy
  • resource allocation
  • specific needs
  • flexibility in career choices
  • social mobility
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • employable skills
  • economic situation
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