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Equality is one the burning topics around the globe. Whether it is a demand for equal pay or asking to stop gender discrimination. Diving
work
 among working class couple is
an
located at or attached to
on
 another topic in which, I reckon that it is completely justified to divide the
work
. There are
such
 places in rural India, where women are deemed to perform certain household chores, whether they are working or not. A male chauvinist society
often think
Suggestion
often thinks
 that why should they
work
, if there is a woman present in
house
Suggestion
the house
.
Also
, at few places it is completely prohibited for a female to go to
work
.
This
 kind of society is going backward and cannot be uplifted in a near future.
Firstly
, there are superstitious people who still believe in child marriage. These citizens marry a girl just for the sake of social responsibility and to fulfil their family needs. But, things are different in urban areas, There are resident who are responsible and who believes in an equal relationship. Where, there is no difference between man and woman. Most of the places in central Europe and other western countries are liberal in the terms of equality and they don't discriminate people by their gender.
For instance
, in the USA, When kids turns 18, they go out of their house to be an independent person rather being at home with their parents and dependent on them. The western culture is more adaptive and ready to welcome
changes
Suggestion
change
. To conclude, It is still not a very common fashion that people accept the equality, but there are still places around the world, where both men and women are treated as a one human being irrespective of their genders.
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