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In the future it will become more difficult to live on Earth so more money should be spent researching how to live on other planets such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The living on Earth will have more problems for
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 generation and people must spend money on developing space technology. In my opinion, I agree that
future
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 human population should start to spend money for opportunity living on Mars.
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 of all, living on Earth
has become
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is becoming
becomes
became
 harder every year because of carbon emissions.
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 means that many manufactures throw carbon into the air.
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, every year in
Antarctica scientists
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Antarctica, scientists
 fixed many anomalies snowing melt and grew level water in the sea
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 why the land of the
planet
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 is flooded. Without carbon emission by manufactures, our
planet
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 can be saved by people.
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, many people start to move to another area where water does not flood the land and in the
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 a great amount of people have to research the other
planet
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 for living there. Another point to consider that moving to another
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such
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 as Mars can help in restoring our
planet
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 for the
future
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 generation.
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, people can restore the environment
such
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 as forest, land, mountains and others.
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, restoring our
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 helps to stop changing global warming because many people who will live on Earth will be to consume in small amounts. Without restoring our environment, Earth can die in the near
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.
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, researching new
planet
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 can help in saving our
planet
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. In conclusion, despite people having a different opinion, I think people must research new
planet
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 for saving a number of people and it will help to restore our environment for the
future
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 generation.

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