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The internet has made knowledge immediately available to people through computers and smartphones all around the world. Much of this knowledge is also free. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend

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In
this
 modern era, the
Internet
 is revolutionizing every aspect of life. Everyone gets all information with the help of
this
 technology and by getting
knowledge
 from it. Like the two sides of a knife, a knife has advantages and disadvantages. The
internet
 has many advantages. Nowadays, everyone has the
internet
 on their cellphones, so they can easily access all kinds of
knowledge
 and information from Google.
For
example
, someone who wants to find flight tickets and he doesn't know how to book, he can
use
 the application available
on
Suggestion
to
 Google and search for tickets easily.
In addition
, the
Internet
 is a good facility for everyone because today most people prefer to
use
 social media rather than watching television or reading newspapers.
Therefore
, most of all the news spread through social websites because of the
Internet
.
For
example
, recently the world was attacked by an outbreak of covid19. So,
this
 type of news spread like wildfire on the
internet
 and everyone gained
this
knowledge
 easily and very quickly. On the other side of the
internet
, it has several negative factors as well. Like, we can search anything on the
Internet
. So, it has bad aspects for children.
For
example
, children can easily access several pornographic websites through their mobile phones. Apart from that, there are other things that help crime too.
For
example
, many criminals
use
 the
internet
 system to hack credit or debit cards and steal them without the
knowledge
 of their owners. In Conclusion, conclude it can be concluded that, it is a very broad technology throughout the world.
This
 has more positive than negative factors, but if we
use
 it for good and wise
purposes not
Accept comma addition
purposes, not
 for crime, we will feel the benefits.
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