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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, enhancing the
safety
 level of traffic is a more concerning issue and some people argue that raising the minimum
age which
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age, which
 is allowed
to
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for
 driving a car or motorbike is the most efficient method for
this
 matter. From my viewpoint, I disagree with
this
 opinion. On the one hand, older people can be more agile and judicious when giving the decision to avoid dangerous circumstances in traffic.
For example
, thanks to
experiences
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the experiences
 they collect
in
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on
 their life, they realize which ways controlling the vehicle can induce accidents so they can
prevent it better
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better prevent it
.
Also
, implementing
this
 regulation makes more time for teenagers to develop their driving skills and cultivate knowledge about road
safety
 through their lessons at school, information, and sources on the internet and experiences from their relatives
such
 as their parents.
On the other hand
, there are more proficient ways to decrease unexpected risks and accidents while driving.
Firstly
, the government should enact stricter and sterner laws to deter who violate
safety
 rules or have willing to do it. Particularly, those punishments which have a harsher impact on driver’s finance will bring significant effects since most of the people are very afraid of losing their self-earned money.
Secondly
, the investment to advance and promote the public transportation system should be focused more to encourage people on using
this
 transport
instead
 of their private vehicles. To
summerise
give a summary (of)
summarize
summarise
,
although
 rising the lowest legal age for driving can provide society with some certain benefit, I believe that it isn’t the most productive way to step up the
safety
 of traffic that there are more useful ways should be applied to doing
this
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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