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The best way to ensure the growth of children is to make parents take parenting courses. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, some people believe that entering in the class teaching how to bring up children is the most crucial approach for parents. In my viewpoint, I am opposed to
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 opinion since it is a good
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 for learning parenting skills and
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knowledge but
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knowledge, but
 not the best and only
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 to do that. On the one hand, these courses provide parents with a methodical syllabus.
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 curriculum is built to bring necessary and comprehensive skills and
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 for parents to raise their kids in a better
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.
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,
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 course can help parents to comprehend the various method can be applied to a particular youngster.
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, those kids who are obstinate and rebellious require a tougher and more drastic method of education that can deal with them better.
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, parents can attain
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the experience
 for parenting their kids by themselves.
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, during the time caring and bringing their children up since they are born, they can pick up various skills and
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 in a natural
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.
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 time demands them to handle different situations continuously and will find out the best method for each case and condition.
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, many parents already have certain primary experience
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 they were nurtured and their affection by the local culture.
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, they have the freedom to choose to attend classes or not
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 on their needs and what they had. In conclusion, I would say that enrolling in classes about parenting is a good
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 but not a mandatory and most important
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 for parents to learn those skills and
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 to raise their children.
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