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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to s

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In the contemporary era, the competition to make companies forced to sell their brand online.Technology to become more and more advance vast number of customers are
prepare
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prepared
preparing
 to do their shopping through websites
such
 Amazonzon or Snap Deal. I believe that these have
more benefits drawback
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more benefits drawbacks
.
To begin
 with, as a buyer who purchase online the major demerits of these is that they cannot see things that how it was looking like or they can not try what they are buying. As it is an online shopping so one can check the
product
 only when it get it delivered to their door.
for
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For
 instance, a consumer who bought shoes online they cannot check the quality or look until and unless it received by them. Despite these, those customers who shopping through online website or online store, they can save their plethora of time, cost and effort. As if they bought thought to visit a store, they have to spend money on their fuel and
also
 spending their valuable time in these.
instead they
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Instead, they
Instead they
can bought
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can buy
 online through just one click. For exemplify, those individuals who bought shoes online they don't need to wear or ask for size
instead
 they just select a colour and size and click on to buy now and within a few day they get it.
In addition
 to these, online seller has a refundable policy.Even a customer not satisfied with the
product
 they can give
then
objective case of they
them
 back in a few days and get their money back according to policy mention in the contract. It makes customer to believe that the seller is trusted and they can buy without any fear.
for
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For
 example, if customers bought online
product
 and they can not according to their demand they can give it back and refund in a few days. To conclude, it id evident that there are several causes of online shopping and a variety of negative effects.
however
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However
, there is a plethora of benefit of buying
product online
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a product online
 it reduces time, cost and effort. Despite
this
 it is refundable policy making buyer more comfortable to buy online.
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