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Some people say that educational success most of the time depends on having a good teacher . Others say that student attitudes also do matters. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Success
 in
education
 depends on several factors. A few individuals opine that
success
 in academics
rely
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relies
 upon a qualified tutor while others believe that it depends on
child’s
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a child’s attitude
attitude
 towards studies. I agree with both the views and
this
 essay will provide the reasons why
success
 in
education
 depends upon both teacher as well as
attitude
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the attitude
 of a child
.
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.
To begin
 with the reasons behind school of thought that having a good mentor is essential to achieve goals in studies.
Firstly
, Teacher plays a pivotal role in the whole
education
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educational
 process by giving understanding of whole content matter to the students. A mentor who has all the essential qualifications and experience to define the subject matter with the help of different teaching methods only can help in achieving
success
.
Secondly
, accurate assessment and feedback which is required for the
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
 of goals in life can only be given by a good tutor who have a good observation and know different methods of assessment.
For example
, a student can score high grades in board exams if he/she would taught by the best teacher who have good knowledge of
subject
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the subject
 and could assess his/her progress accurately. Moving towards the causes behind the thought that children’s
attitude
 towards studies
also
 matters. Positive point of view of school goers towards academic studies would force them to study honestly to achieve good grades for better future and they would eventually achieve their goals in life
.
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.
Therefore despite
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Therefore, despite
 of having good resources of
education including
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education, including
 good educational institution
,
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,
best teachers they would not attain goals and
success
 if
attitude
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the attitude
 is not positive and leading towards
success
. In conclusion, I believe in order to achieve educational
goals both
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goals, both
 good
teacher
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teachers
 as well as goal of having good grades or a role model are essential.
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