The restoration of old buildings in many cities in the world involve a lot of government expenditures. This money should be used in new housing and road development. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In
this
contemporary era, where
presevation
the activity of protecting something from loss or danger
preservation
of former buildings which give identity to
nation
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nations
a nation
across the world have become significant
to
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in
the country. A fraction of society advocates that ministry should allocate huge expenditures to basic human needs
such
as highway and
reaidency
the act of dwelling in a place
residency
. I partially agree with
this
notion which
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will justify in upcoming segments with relevant examples
First
and
formost
ranking above all others
foremost
, in all
nation
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nations
across the world since few decades,
traffic
congestion
has been flourishing by leaps and bound due to evolution of motor vehicles. By fabricating new highways, there is a
possibilities
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possibility
to decline
traffic
congestion
. To elucidate, according to
recent survey
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a recent survey
which was carried out by leading
newspapers illustrated
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newspapers, illustrated
that in Delhi city proportion of
traffic
congestion
about 10% had decreased in 2018 after developing six lane highways. Apart from
this
, in developing countries
suchs
to so extreme a degree
such
as
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
,
srilanka where
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Sri Lanka, where
Sri Lanka where
sri Lanka where
sri lanka where
there are
plethora
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a plethora
of
improverished
poor enough to need help from others
impoverished
dwellers as compared to wealthy individuals. So that it has become mandatory to build new residency for
battermant
a change for the better; progress in development
betterment
of poor people. If state administrators make new buildings for
them which
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them, which
will lead to collapse
precentage
a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)
percentage
percentages
of poor citizens
Conversely
, historical buildings help us to connect with our culture and tradition.
Infact maintaining
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In fact, maintaining
In fact maintaining
ancient building
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an ancient building
the ancient building
is
excellent way
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an excellent way
to attract international travellers across the world by its marvellous look.
Therefore if
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Therefore, if
governments do not ready to reform old buildings which are demolished due to natural disasters
,
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,
ultimately they will face fall down of annual income in tourist sector due to lack of tourist. I would like to conclude by saying that I understand that preservation of historical monuments do not only bring tourists to nation but
also
help us to understand the importance of culture and traditions, I believe that it is essential to maintain
traffic
congestion
by making new highways and locality of underprivileged people by allowing new residency
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