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some people think that the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as unemployed and homeless people Do you agree are disagree?

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It is being argued that the administration should look after the unemployed and homeless individuals. I agree to
this
 to some extent. On the one hand, it is the
government
's responsibility to take responsibility of all the people living in the country, even if they are unemployed and homeless and not
contributing the country's
Suggestion
contributing to the country's
 economy. The reason for
that is
, if they are not having a job or a house, it means the
government
 is lacking in providing them employment opportunities which contributes to the factor that they can't afford to buy or rent the accommodations. That's why the
government
 should provide funds so that they can have money for their expenses and should try to provide them employment opportunities according to their qualifications and skills.
Moreover
, these people
also
 voted in the elections and contributed in making the
government
 so, because of that, they should get assistance from the
government
 in their bad times.
On the other hand
, the state should
not
negation of a word or group of words
Not
 provide care for all the unemployed and homeless people because some of them disregarded the job options and chose to be unemployed and homeless, as
that is
 an easier way to live a life without doing any hard work. Added to that, some people willingly leave their job and become unemployed. Due to their inability of paying rents and mortgages they become homeless. In
such
 cases, the
government
 should not take care of
such
 people, as they are responsible for their own situation. In conclusion, if it is the
government
's disability to provide jobs for people,
then
 it should take care of
such
 people,
however
, if
people
Suggestion
People
 chose to be unemployed and homeless,
then
 they don't deserve any assistance from the
government
.
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