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Some people like to spend their leisure time after work with co-workers while others prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Some would argue that it is best to spend spare
time
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 after
work
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 with colleagues, while others say it is better to have their own
life
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. While many people want to have a private
life
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 of their own, I believe that it is advantageous to communicate with the friends from
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work place
Suggestion
the work place
work places
. Individuals want to have a private
life
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 because they would like to avoid gossip at
workplace
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the workplace
.
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, there are some people at company who are very interested in spreading news of personal
life
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 to others just for
time
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 pass.
However
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, I believe that workers at
firm
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the firm
a firm
firms
 should spend some quality
time
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 together. Associating with co-workers after working hours has
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 own benefits. By communicating with colleagues outside
office
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the office
, we will be able to know the problems they are facing during
work
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, get to know the other person and suggest measures to avoid the errors.
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, conducting team dinners from
time
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-to-
time
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 enables the project manager to gather the issues and he can provide suitable solutions within a limited
time
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 frame. In conclusion,
although
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 some people prefer to keep personal
life
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 apart from
work
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, I think it is beneficial to have a harmonious relation with workers in leisure
time
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.
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