In many countries, teenagers are encouraged to find part-time jobs. Some think this is a good development while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
High school students are advised to take part in temporary jobs to enhance their skills by several countries. Some would argue that it is not beneficial for them, while I believe that it is good for them to develop their social skills.
Many people think that it is a waste of time for students to have irregular jobs. By focusing on the jobs, several students don’t pay attention during classes and complete the homework in time because of the fatigue and stress from the job which results in a lower score of the tests.
For example
, a student who had school from 7 A
.M. have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
am
to
5 P.M. Suggestion
To
took
a part-time job at café from 6:30 P.M. Suggestion
Took
to
11 P.M. Suggestion
To
and
he doesn’t have any time for preparation of the exam held on the Suggestion
And
next
day in which he had just got a pass mark receiving a warning from teacher to pay attention in classes. However
, I think that these jobs help students with a lower background to earn money and also
have practical exposure to the subjects if they are subject related.
In my opinion, teenagers who have jobs are excelled
in schools. They should take jobs in the fields they are interested in because it develops their intelligence and gets higher marks in those specific subjects. Suggestion
excelling
Also
, people from backward class struggle to attend advanced classes due to their limited budget and jobs make it easier for them to earn money. For example
, a student interested in archaeology took a job in a museum which
helped him in learning more about the subject and have practical experience in that field.
In conclusion, Accept comma addition
museum, which
although
jobs may seem to be a diversion for youth to focus on their studies, I strongly believe that if they put their interest in a specific field they want to excel, it won’t be an issue to them and increase their development.Submitted by Naga Lakshmi karna on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite